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PostSubject: Casey Young   Thu Jun 18, 2009 12:05 am

Name:Casey Young
Age:18
Gender:male
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Bio: Casey was destaned as a baby to be the most skilled fighter in his tribe. Once he grew old enough (6 years of age) he was given his birth rights Kongol and Hatchle in which had great power, but he wasn't trused to use there full potential.So the tribe leader had his swords bound to 1%. After 5 years of waiting just to get to such a low power level as 20%. He destroyed most of his planet. then he traveled from one world to the next world attempting to find someone to unbind his swords so he could see how much damage he could realy do, but so far his search has been unsuccessful. Now after 5 years of searching he comes across a solid tip on someone who might be able to increase his swords power. the magician got there power to 39%. which wasent enough so Casey told the magician to try to make them stronger, but the magician wasent able to make the any more stronger without killing herself. at that instant casey said DIEING IS NOT THE PROBLEM!!!!!. But she still wouldn't do it sooo...... he saduced her in to getting the job done ;p . After she died & brought the power level to 60% he did a forbidden revival technique that droped his power by 5% good thing he liked her or he would have let her stay dead. So 2 years have pass looking for more power he gets attacked out of nowhere and gets knocked out.Then casey woke up at the top of a volcano surounded by what seemed to be an army of corpses. he was covered in blood with his broad swords Kongol and Hatchle in his hands. he has absolutely no idea who he is or where he came from. there is only one thing he is sure of, created the was to KILL.

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PostSubject: Re: Casey Young   Thu Jun 18, 2009 8:00 pm

Extend your bio please...
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PostSubject: Re: Casey Young   Thu Jun 18, 2009 8:09 pm

Errmm uh. As nicely strewn together as it is, perhaps you should rewrite your bio to have a short but legible and comprehensible background(Despite what rules may say, we really expect four sentences of the same length as yours)

Beyond that, as Axis has stated, your CS is fine.
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PostSubject: Re: Casey Young   Fri Jun 19, 2009 9:24 pm

Axis wrote:
Extend your bio please...
ok i fixed my BIO
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PostSubject: Re: Casey Young   Sat Jun 20, 2009 10:32 pm

Approve, and one of the best bios we have
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PostSubject: Re: Casey Young   Tue Jun 23, 2009 7:38 pm

Best bio?

Perhaps in length, and that may be a good thing.

Although there appears to be some minor spelling problems and few capitalization errors ... and a minor grammatical error here and there. But 'tis only natural for people to make mistakes, and the ratio of errors to non-errors is quite minimal.

Definitely APPROVED, good sir.
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